A poem I wrote? Critiques please?

I like it. It's very positive with a hint of darkness. My only critique is that you don't have to force a rhyme on every line. It won't ruin it to have a few lines that don't rhyme or slant rhyme a little. If you don't want to change it maybe you could add a line between two rhyming ones that doesn't rhyme for example AbA. Sounds very dramatic. Anyhow good work :)